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I've forgotten who I am
Like a shadow in the night
Lost in an ocean of darkness
Until someone shines the light

Can you please help me search?
For a forgotten past
I long to be myself again
This is happening all too fast

I've forgotten who I am
Like a light in a deep mist
I’m too far out of reach
Yet I’m still within your midst

Can you please rescue me?
Bring back life to a dead mind
The doctors say it's all over
We're running out of time

I've forgotten who I am
Or how you used to feel
Your touch is now replaced
With a pain that's all too real

Can you please help me remember?
Tell me how, why or when
Then I can finally be at peace
With whom I've always been
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A poem I wrote inspired by the amazing [link]

check out his page b/c he writes very good poetry!

I imagine someone that was in a coma finally coming out of it and remembering everyone (family and friends) except themself. Like waking up in the body of a doll.
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~CuddleSlut17 Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a great piece love the flow. Kind of the style I would write. It stands out with a lot of emotion. Great job.
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~No-Face181 Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D thank you so much!
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~Darth-azazel Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
This is tripped out. I get this feeling sometimes in reverse...i think
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~No-Face181 Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yeah I do too. :D im happy u like it though.
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~tommyboywood Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
nice
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~No-Face181 Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thx :D
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Oh I really love this piece! I kept thinking of alzheimer's. Though I like the conept of a coma patient more! Loved the format!!
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~No-Face181 Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D thank you so much, and it does sound kinda like a person with Alzheimer disease.
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*Rifle1980 Jan 24, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much for mentioning my poem :) But really your poem stands out on its own as a wonderful piece of writing in its own right. I love it. Its exactly the style i love to read and write. I like the repetition of ''i've forgotten who i am'' too and i think you chose some really great rhymes here. Makes it really nice to read :)
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Mood: Love ~No-Face181 Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D thank you! I'm so happy that you like it! big relief!
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